I know i stand in line
and don’t have any say
but i pretend it’s fine
For bit of sunshine,
to prickle down my way
I know i stand in line
Is love never to be mine
hopes grow and die each day
but i pretend it’s fine
don’t you again assign
to break me like clay
I know i stand in line
Either mortal or divine
each does my soul slay
but i pretend it’s fine
Give me just one sign
life forever won’t b gray
I know i stand in line
but i pretend it’s fine
This form of poetry isย Villanelle (Click to learn more about it)
Prompted @ Carry On Tuesday
Also submitted to One Shot Wednesday
I enjoy formal poetry, particularly villanelles. It’s amazing how every poet comes up with something different for the formula.
yeah .. how much you try, each person has a distinct style !! ๐
you beautifully capture that patiently waiting in line until something happens that’s worth the waiting..
mine is here
wish it truly is worth the wait for all ๐
You have expressed your patience well and really love your poetry. Never tried villanelles before…thanks for the link. Hugs x
waiting to see you try this form now !! thanks for all the love ๐
there’s a sadness here, but a beautiful sadness….nicely done.
thank you !!
Such great patience expressed here. Excellently done.
This acce`tance is so poigant and sad… How beautifully you write.
So glad I came by…
Shame -no followers?
Dulce
oh my standing in line poem would be filled with angst…smiles. yet yours is so eloquent….nice one shot!
lovely write – you can feel the sense of waiting and wanting….blessings ..bkm
Nice one shot! Great form. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender
Enjoyed this a lot. Yes I believe you can stick to the model or change it too. I’m writing one now or trying to; it hasn’t quite glued itself together for me. I enjoyed this very much. You capture tedium and anxiety here very well. Well done. Thank you. Gay
And oh how the wating can ache! You’ve captured that well here, just wanting a bit of sunshine. Great poem:)
I am not a student of poetry, so any exposure to new forms is appreciated. I would stand in line to make this read.
To pretend all is well gets so tiring. Waiting is the hardest part…
I feel like I’m back in college reading all of this Great poetry today.
Yours Rocked baby!!
I have learned something new here. I enjoyed your poem immensely.
What a beauty Nimue..left me speechless..love it really..:)))
Beautiful beyond words.
Sometimes, even when we have love, we stand in line behind the immediate needs, emergencies and just …life.
But love will find a way.
I really like how you described the process of waiting — and how we wait for so much — without once mentioning the word. Nice one.
yet another new style i have learned today..so thank you for bringing that to me…as for the poem..In Line…such a British thing to do, wait in line until its our turn and then rue missing the chance…cheers pete
Nothing more tedious than being stuck in a queue, eh?
At least the hopes keep growing each day… maybe they’ll start to last.
Count me among those learning a new poetic form from this terrific poem of yours. I really liked it. My first reaction was to think “no, it’s not fine.” But then I thought of all the times when waiting for my turn to come has resulted in something good, something very worth the wait. Really nice One Shot.
I loved this unique way of using repetitions! It was masterfully done, and totally added to the effect!
I hate standing in lines… but then again, as long as the lady behind counter doesn’t break for lunch, I know it’s fine ๐
I loved the villanelle. You reminded me that I gotta write another one after very long.
curling and uncurling
It sounds like you’re generating issues yourself by looking for to solve this problem instead of looking at why their is a trouble from the Very first place. thanks !!! very really helpful post!
Very nicely put ……….