Between the loud conversation
in the overlapping pauses
we look at each other
from corner of the eye;
the silence has its riches –
i take a sip of its memories,
you nibble at the dreams
while our present connects us,
with the painful realization
that no words can be persuasive
enough to bind you to me
no feelings can trap yours
You are as much unknown
as my heart feels you inside
as much toxic is your presence
as heavenly seems your touch
your eyes overpower my words
and the remaining breaths
you seal with one last kiss
your musty essence erasing me –
one goodbye that was to be final,
I realized it not then,fortunately.
Prompted @ We Write Poems , Three Word Wednesday
wow… great, eyes overpower my words… 🙂
powerful poem.
You drew me in and made me feel the connection, and then dropped the bomb. Good writing!
“You are as much unknown
as my heart feels you inside”
I really love that part! Bittersweet poem. Nicely done.
Pamela
Great poem. Loved the last line. Blessings to you…
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A conflicted poem, giving a great emotional rollercoaster ride. So many rich metaphors to dance around with:
the silence has its riches –
i take a sip of its memories,
you nibble at the dreams
Wow!
That moment will forever be in their memory for some time. A sad mournful memory of both love and loss, beautifully expressed.
It might stay there in memories forever ..
The last few days of a burning relationship. Amazing!
Desires that won’t last long.
A known warmth that would fade to be.
An interesting take on a breaking up.
If autobiographical, this poem says that you are having a difficult time. I hope not, but if you are, bon courage.
It happened long time back ! Its in the memories now .. not in my pain 🙂
Quite an aware and wisee viewpoint actually.
I like this poem
excellent wish i had seen this poem a year earlier could have used it 🙂
excellent
May you never again have to use it Bikram !
Thanks for the words of appreciation though 🙂
An excellent work on such a difficult subject….
Great as usual, thank you for sharing
Love/Eclipse
Wow! that was a great one. Though a bit late for my age presently, the essence of it was, at one point in time, certainly part of my indulgence. Very nostalgic! Great piece of work.
‘sip of memories’..’nibble of dreams’..what a sensuous poem..Jae
this is full of beauty and power. Thanks for sharing.
a rolllllllllllller coaster indeed…..nice ride and thanks for sharing your words
Fantastic writing 🙂
Ohhhh that left me tingling. Nice one.
sensuos and intelligent poem LN. Sometimes God spares us from seeing the reality so we could enjoy that moment and sometimes our brain fails us to cause us misery.
trisha
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I guess both of these happened here in the order mentioned .. bottom line : misery !