Oh how i wished there could be a fire
in eyes that talked so much,
in hands that yearned to touch
in heart that beat much faster
in words that were said never.
But all i felt was an overpowering desire
to let eyes drink all that you showed
to let hands trace the things you owned
to let heart play music to your beat
to let words die before i could speak.
Written for We Write Poems [ fire] , Submitted to Poets Rally [week 41]
Wonderful. I wish I could be water :p
Beautiful expression of love and desire 😛
Ahh, we burn, but because we do, we are always in need of more fuel,
Elizabeth
Another great post. Thanks for sharing this. Spending time sitting down to writing short stories and poems is something I truly enjoy in life. I enjoy reading your blog very much.
A Great Day for Spring – Poem
An interestting statement of passion and desire.
Very nicely done.
i seeked for love and met only desire…..
fabulous poem nimue.
An excellent take on the prompt, the wishing for fire, and then the reality. The second half strikes me as sad.
I love the way you turned your wishes into action!
nice wishes for an enchanted evening.. my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/
Oh how i wished there could be a fire
in eyes that talked so much,
in hands that yearned to touch……
love the lines very much.
powerful fire,
thanks for sharing…;)
Gosh, if I am indeed reading this correctly (if there IS a correct version, which so often there isn’t),then this is so sad! The speaker of the poem has such a heart and I feel sad for them as they realise that little hides behind the facade of the attention seeker, who seems to possess no desire other than to be wanted and liked. And yet, the sadness continues in the realisation that the facade could indeed be an insecurity on the part of the attention-seeker whose ‘eyes []talked so much’ -perhaps even with a different reason to that which is noticed on a first reason.
Compelling and skillful! Thank you for sharing.
glh 🙂
Lovely rhymes, beautiful poem!
No fire but a nice poem anyway…
I loved the desire underlying all of it.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/04/07/lovers-we-are-now/
words are often over-rated.. actions are so much more…
Such a captivating write…beautiful imagery…overflowing passion. A most enjoyable poem.
That was fire- licious … May you have everything you wish!
loved it Nimue.. Superb.. here is my rally poem… a dream she is… a kiss seals…
Someone is Special
Oh, oh…this is so beautiful, short and sweet Nimue…if your desire happens, then you’ll be on fire!
Brilliantly put.. such few words.. yet U said it exactly one feels in love. Really nice..!
I am from ~
http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/04/02/the-alliterated-odes-the-alliterated-symphonies-of-the-mind/
Beautiful……
romantic and desirous, you amaze a lot in little words, Nimue! 🙂
this is very telling , you should add the mystery of the story. in hidden verse for the reader to ant more. Excellent verse