And I thought I could not live through the pain
of losing first the people,
better to death i said once in rage;
losing people and then the things
that reminded me of those gone,
that was bound to hurt,and a lot.
what would have held my tears better
But the void i feared did not hurt,
memories flooded it like warm blood,
pain was numbing , tears all dry,
words were lost and so was a part of me.
lost things never hurt more than people
there was no desperate attempts
to restore any of that , any time
the things i mean, not relations
as if you alone could make them work
the emptiness hardened the heart
more than the people who stepped over it..
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This was a response to Tuesday Tryout : Poem on things meaningful to you . Last month my laptop got formatted by mistake and I lost all my poetry , music , movies , pictures and what all .. And that emptiness still lives in my heart but strangely , it did not hurt any day , I never thought about it until i read the prompt.
Also submitted to dVrse Poets pub
The last two lines are so very powerful in the raw emotions…enjoyed the poem.
dark – sad – lonely thoughts
Great write !
evocative write…those lost leave holes in our lives for sure…cold memories that catch us at odd times, even in their warmth…nice write…
oh, wow, to lose all of that work and time – I would be devasted but what do us poets do when devasted but write poetry. good to see you are continuing on. Nicely expressed and I am sorry for your loss.
Time and space and circumstance, is to blame for all the loss we come across.. and that’s how things go ahead .. wer heart can breathe in its own space a mind can see a new day …
it’s hard to fill in the huge gaping hole that was caused by the absence of those people who walked away from us.
Hmmm Good .. Such people deserve the hardened heart.. as they will hurt us again ..
people who have walked over well let them be .. what do they know what they are missing
I wonder if your reaction to your loss, which is huge, is following the steps of grieving. I like the way you have structured the poem with the italicised asides, which can be read together. And, I like the comparison of loss of people to loss of things, as a measure of what is meaningful to you.
margo
I dislike goodbyes of any sort, but with death a certain closure occurs, at least you know, this is the end…
Thanks for the visit! 🙂
Wow! Total data loss is a prompt I never want to use. Still, you put it to great use in an emotional poem. When one has lemons . . . .
Hi, Rob Kistner here. This is a piece well written, engaging – good work… mine is here: http://www.image-verse.com/clown
powerful piece I especially like the last 2 lines – they feel so raw